CK Lynn

Thanks to everyone who reviewed! I'm now working on the reivsed version.

The repitition is because this is a pantoum, which is a form of poetry using a four-line verse. The first and third line of every verse is the second and ...

This was fantastic. The only thing I caught was one you spelled "was" as "wazs".

This was awsome. No grammar mistakes or spelling mistake that I could find, and the old English words really added a nice ambiance and belivability to the feeling of it. ...

I like this. It could do with some more punctuation, though. And maybe if you tied the stanzas together a bit more--they seem slightly unraveled. This is good though, subtle ...

Thanks! I'll work on the revisions.

The only good verse in here are 3 and 5, but they are almost tresspassing into emo territory. If you added more about this person, who they are, what they ...

I really like that series, though the first book more so than the second. For me it rates somewhere after A Great and Terrible Beauty, but before Blood and Chocolate, ...

Thanks for the crit! It was helpful.

The first couple verses I wasn't that found of. The ending surprised me. If this person is so unsure about the other, how can the other be so close? It ...

I liked this. It could go a bit faster, though, cut out the unnessecary discription.

This was interesting. It was a unique idea. I do think it could be longer, though. I'm looking forward to the continuation.

For anyone interested: I'm working on the novel version, firt chaptershould be posted in Advanced Crits soon.

I really can't think of much to like about this, sorry. It's an okay idea, its just presented in a way thats kind of childish. I'd like to see it ...

Thanks for the critiques!